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#1 Spherical Ice

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Posted 20 August 2011 - 09:48 AM

I've submitted this poem, hopefully it'll get in:

I'm husky, burly, and smell of decay,
As I celebrate Independence Day,
We all loathe the Doctor Sloth!
As we swear our solemn oath,
To never serve that evil beast.
Now celebrate! We'll eat and feast!
And dance until the morning's nigh,
Come on, stand up! Don't be shy!
For my name's Galgorax Jin,
A victim of the Doctor's sin,
He morphed me into a monster,
I hate him, and my friend's concur!
So grab some Deep-Fried Gormball Soup,
And grab a seat, Usul and Lupe,
And together, we'll all say,
Happy Independence Day!

#2 Hayley Williams

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Posted 20 August 2011 - 09:52 AM

Pretty good poem, all in all. The third and fourth lines, I don't think rhyme, unless Sloth isn't pronounced as sloth. The only thing that I could see potentially stopping it from going in is that it seems too short for TNT. Try writing a poem a bit longer next time, but make sure it's enjoyable.

#3 Spherical Ice

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Posted 22 August 2011 - 12:05 PM

Well according to Rhymezone it's pronounced sloath so yeah.

Anyway I got this NM from TNT so here's hoping:
Dear Haroun,

Your entry for Poetry Contest has been held over by the judges. While this does not mean that you have won, it does mean that you have made a good first impression and they have saved your entry for closer consideration. That is a good sign. ;)

We just want to make sure you are aware of this in case you had it in mind to change your entry. It would probably be best not to at this point. ;)

So congratulations! If the status of your entry changes after further perusal, you will be notified.

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